Friday, October 23, 2020

Week 9 Story: Picking Sides

Picking Sides

    On a cloudy, dark day, Samoa woke up with his heart set on beating his rival Kumar. They have always been unpleasant with each other, despite them being brothers. Their hate for each other grew to the point of brotherhood meaning nothing to either of them. They always needed teachings from their protector, as they were two royal men of the kingdom. Their protector was the mighty Krishna. Krishna is found as guidance to Samoa and Kumar. While Samoa finds a way to attack his brother, Kumar has other plans of playing outside the rules. Krishna has set rules and specifications that each of them cannot break. This is mostly due to the anger of Kumar and his uncontrollable anger. Kumar aims to put an end to this never-ending battle by planning on cutting Samoa's neck off. This would be a difficult task as Samoa is a very skilled archer, where he keeps distance from his enemy and strike. Kumar, however, is not a force to be reckoned with as he is the commander of their army. Although he is the commander, he is still and evil. He hired assassins to hunt with him in search for Samoa. Samoa is a very skilled hunter and knows how to hide his tracks. Krishna found out about Kumar's evil plan, and decided to help Samoa to get things on an even playing fields. Krishna gives Samoa a magical map that shows his enemy's pinpoint location. Samoa's hunting and archery skills came in clutch as he aimed his longbow to the sky and shoots Kumar from miles away. Kumar is confused as to how Samoa is shooting him from the skies. Samoa released one final stretch and shoots his trusty bow, and he landed his shot with ultimate accuracy and precision. This leaves the kingdom shook as to how, and why such a tragedy happened. 



Authors Notes: This revision was inspired by the story in Mahabharata, Arjuna and Karna. The fight scene between the two was such a strong point in the plot, I decided to take this plot and switch up the dynamics of the characters. While originally Arjuna and Karna is not related, in this revised edition, I made Samoa (Arjuna) and Kumar (Karna) brothers to make a more deeper connection between the two. This allowed me to create a more depth storyline, that I can improve on as weeks go. 


Bibliography: Mahabharata, Section 11: Arjuna and Karna

3 comments:

  1. Hey PB, you did a great job on your revision of the Mahabharata story of Arjuna and Karna this week! I enjoyed how you made Arjuna and Karna brothers for them to gain a greater attachment, and you definately met your goal of delving deeper into the storyline. I wonder what would happen if you completely turned their relationship around and made them enemies? There would be numerous ways to twist and turn the storyline in this way.

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  2. Hi PB,
    I really like the introduction of the brother connection into the story. It makes me see Kumar, Karna, as a much more evil figure. It also made me root for Samoa, Arjuna, to win and glad that Krishna gave him the map. However, I wonder why the kingdom is shocked? Did the brothers keep their feud hidden? It sounded like it has been going on for a while so I would have assumed the people would have known.

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  3. Hey PB! You did such a great job in this story! I really liked your rendition of the story of Arjuna and Karna. I thought how you made them brothers made the fight even more significant. Something about a sibling rivalry am I right? Haha I also enjoyed that you made the story more modern with your wording. Great job in this story and look forward to reading more of your renditions!

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