Friday, October 9, 2020

Week 7 Story:

Never Enough

    Timothy, a college teenager who has found himself in a tough situation. After being sacked from multiple jobs, Tim finally admitted to himself that he needs to start taking life seriously. He needed money to live his day to day life. He had no food, and not enough money for rent and bills. One day, his good friend Bryson comes into town with an idea. He tells Tim of this game at the casino called 21. Bryson explains to Tim that there is a method to win the game every time, and it guarantees you money. Trusting Bryson with all his might, Tim and Bryson made their way to the casino. The casino was filled with money-hungry men and women. Timothy grew with excitement to the sound of bells and whistles of contestants winning. Not only did Tim decide to bring every penny to his name, but decided that this would be the day he gets his big break. Bryson explains to Tim how the game works, and that the trick is to stop playing once you triple or double your profit. This was the only simple instruction Bryson gave Timothy before he leaves him to go play some games of his own. Timothy waited patiently in line to play the game. Each contestant that played left with a good sum of money. Finally, it was Timothy's turn to take his crack at the game. He started off with a solid $100 to start off to get a feel for the game and how it worked. After seeing how easy it was, he decided to add all of his money into the pot. It was a total of $500. He won small amounts at first but ended up with a total of $2000. People behind him in line grew with rage as Timothy would not leave the game, as greed for money grew. Timothy is fuming with excitement as he won plenty of money to make do for a little. Bryson sees the line for the game in the distance and Timothy playing. He makes his way over to the game to find out that Timothy had gone way over the limit, and did not stop at the appropriate time. Timothy takes one final greedy take on the game; where he finds himself in an even bigger hole. Timothy's greed and hunger for money resulted in a loss for everyone. Timothy went home with utter sadness and rage. He blamed Bryson for his own mistakes and did not learn from the lesson. He was too stubborn and too hot-headed to take the time to understand and own up to his mistakes. 


Authors Note: For this week, I chose to rewrite my own version from the concept of "The Gambling Match". In this section, the story concerns Duryodhana fighting with the Pandavas. This was due to the gambling game performed with dice. Shakhuni was a character that was very skilled in this game. Knowing that the game had no certainty on a win, they decided to take the risk. In this version of mine, I want to add a scheme in my plot where the character learns from not knowing his limits. 

Bibliography: PDE Mahabharata. The Gambling Match

4 comments:

  1. Hi PB!
    I like how you took the gambling concept and made it into a more modern story. I would suggest adding some dialogue into this piece just to give us some more insight into Bryson and Tim's personalities. The ending also feels slightly rushed so maybe linger longer in Tim's anger and maybe even include some of the aftermath. This was an enjoyable read!

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    1. Hey Riley, I appreciate your kind words. I was planning on adding more dialogue just like you suggested. I did that on purpose, so I could do that for revision. Doing this gave me enough time to think of some creative dialogue. I agree with you on the ending as well, I will try to do better on the progression.

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  2. Hi PB,
    I liked your story. I am a big gambler myself and I have definitely felt like Timothy going home after gambling with disappointment and sadness in myself . I liked how you decided to add a scheme in your plot that the character learns from not realizing certain things. Great job!

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    1. Hello Logan, I appreciate your feedback. I am also a gambler myself, which is what inspired this story. Do not tell anyone, but this story may or may not have been about myself. I decided to add a scheme in this story because I believe that a good moral theme and lesson is important in any reading. Thank you once again.

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